#Every male was circumcised

This can be stated in active form. AT: "Every male received circumcision" or "So Hamor and Shechem had someone circumcise all the men" (See: [[:en:ta:vol2:translate:figs_activepassive]])

#On the third day

This can be stated without the ordinal number. AT: "After two days" (See: [[:en:ta:vol2:translate:translate_ordinal]])

#when they were very sore

"when the men of the city were very sore"

#each man took his sword

"took their swords"

#went to the unsuspecting city

Here "city" stands for the people. AT: "entered the city where the people did not think the Israelites would harm them" (See: [[:en:ta:vol2:translate:figs_metonymy]])

#city, and killed all the males

This can be translated as a new sentence. AT: "city. Simeon and Levi killed all the men of the city"

#with the edge of the sword

Here "edge" stands for the blade of the sword. AT: "with the blade of their swords" or "with their swords" (See: [[:en:ta:vol2:translate:figs_synecdoche]])